Dream her life away
I’m writing a ‘pantoum poem’ for the first time which is made up of four-line stanzas in which the second and fourth lines of each stanza are used as first and third lines of the next stanza. If you read this, let me know what you think please. Does the poem feel disjointed?
She hasn’t felt the touch of a hand to greet herThe warmth of a hug to comfort herThe touch of a man to express his loveWhere did it all go wrong The warmth of a hug to comfort herWhen she was lonely and feeling blueWhere did it all go wrongWhen she gave her love in abundance When she was lonely and feeling blueShe went into a dream worldWhen she gave her love in abundanceHer friends were busy with their lives She went into a dream worldPretending to be in a happy familyHer friends were busy with their livesShe was staring into space or tv Pretending to be in a happy familyWas not always easy for herShe was staring into space or tvShe had to accept herself the way she was